Firefly Drabble: What River Sees

[ashlesha17.livejournal.com]

ashlesha17
Fandom: Firefly
Title: Strange Brains See Things Others Miss
Character: River
Prompt: See
Word Count: 100
Disclaimer: I own nothing
Spoilers: None
Rating: G
Written for: weaselyangel

River sees Simon crying though there are no tears on his face

She sees Inara’s anguish in her alluring walk

She sees Mal’s home Shadow, now just a burnt shell

She sees Kaylee’s poor, but happy home crowded and colorful

She sees Hera and Mal’s heartbreak through Zoe’s eyes

She sees the fellow prisoners laughing at Wash’s shadow puppets forgetting for a little while

She sees Book’s rows of vegetables thriving as he prays for forgiveness

She sees Jayne slowly writing to his mother always tucking credits into the envelope

River wishes he could see who she used to be.

Comments

[concise.livejournal.com]

This was really good.

She sees Jayne slowly writing to his mother always tucking credits into the envelope

Great job!

[ashlesha17.livejournal.com]

friendlytampon,

Thanks for your comments. I wasn't sure about the repetitive nature of the structure so I'm glad you liked it.

I'm a Jayne lover, he may love to kill things, but the boy loves his mama.

I've been doing alot of ff drabbles to get ready for a longer story (series) I promised a good friend, but even though I've watched the series to death, this fandoms dialog daunts me. But friendly words *smiling* definitely help.

thanks

lesha